Eternal Love..

When I crawled on the ground and took baby steps

I fixed my eyes on you

Even when I hung upside down from a twig in a silky cocoon

I dreamt of you

At long last, I evolve and flutter so high,

Only to reunite with you, my love!

butterfly-effect

My first attempt in being so short and crisp. 😛

Prompts include:

Word prompt: REUNION, Phrase Prompt: ‘At long last’ and the Picture Prompt

from-15-to-50

 

Linking this to the Fiction Challenge ‘From 15 to 50′

Comments

  1. vinodinii says:

    This was such a beautiful take on the prompt. Evolution never sounded so fabulous 🙂

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  2. Beautiful! Loved your take on the prompt Shalini.. 🙂

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  3. Your short and crisp poem touched so many hearts, lovely.

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  4. Beautiful. First attempt including all the three? Amazing 🙂 Indeed, the pic was the hardest.

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  5. Yay.. Like minds, think alike!! 😀

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  6. Shalzz, I’m coming here after linking up to the linky, and this has been a surprise for me….
    Mine is just a mirror image of urs !

    Well done 🙂 Loved the crispiness here !!

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  7. aseemrastogi2 says:

    Surely doesn’t seem like your first attempt at flash fiction. A beautiful way to capture the life cycle of a butterfly :).

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  8. Romantic!!!

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  9. This had depth and a lovely imagery to it too! Lovely!

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  10. Beautiful words shalini…I love ur description of the life cycle of the butterfly…so much like our lives…isnt it…

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  11. And for your first attempt at the short and crisp you manage to include all of the prompts! Stop doubting yourself…it was beautiful! 🙂

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  12. WOW..this was such a wonderful way to capture the life cycle of the butterfly! superb!

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  13. Dear Shalini,

    I must say that this doesn’t seem like your first attempt 🙂 Very pleased with what you have done here! I especially liked the evolution that you built , of the butterfly’s life cycle. Somehow it also resonates with our own growth, doesn’t it? 🙂

    Thank you for linking up with the Fiction hop!

    Shailaja

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    • Coming from you, these words mean a lot! Honestly! Thanks for the fabulous endeavor. It’s only cos of that, I attempted this. And I feel so good. Yay!!! ❤

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  14. This is fabulous, Shalini! Loved it.

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  15. A very good attempt! Keep at it!

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  16. Crisp and meaningful at the same time 🙂 Keep writing more

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  17. Superbly written, Shalini! Very crisp, and moving 🙂

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